Revisions, Part 1: Better Vocabulary

To make our songs better, we need to follow these steps to improve the vocabulary and phrasing of our songs:

1)  Mark off words or phrases in your songs that need improvement with a V.

2)  Go back to all your "V"s and make changes.

You want to change words to:


A) Use a word that fits with your song better.  For example, I changed one of my lines to "smoggy air" instead of "dirty air."  This works better with my song!


B) Make the song clearer.


C) Make the song sound better.